Wednesday, July 13, 2011

Please critique this excerpt. :)?

Sorry, but it's kind of dull. There's no hook, nothing making me want to read more. It's just a dull conversation between two guys about a bike. Okay... that's not that interesting for me. Sorry. There's nothing unique or different about it that makes me want to read on. You want to have a hook to grab our attention. You don't.

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